tick-tock chortles accompany
hands playing circuitous
games of catch-me-if-you-can
Assertive keepers of time
the digital hours slide
impassive faces glowing
red or green or blue
Church bell’s solemn voice
pronounces a day’s demise
the rhetorical toll
tarrying in the dusk
The nemesis stalks
heartbeat by heartbeat
twining past and present
leaving the future undone
Talon (ktn) © 2010
43 comments:
Powerful and profound - I like this. Thanks for sharing.
All the best, Boonie
The pic of playful Missy in her new box is terrific! So cute!
Time has certainly been stressing me out a bit lately-
I really like how the last stanza leaves an impression of time being braided!
HI Talon .. the picture is brilliant - beautiful cat! I could have a cuddle right now!! Purring delight.
Time is time isn't it .. it's sliding away from the present, taking us to the future ..
Great poem - love it .. thank you.. Hilary
I want to know who steals time. I always think there is enough of it and when I come to it it's gone again!
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ha. yes indeed the enemy is...the thief...time keeps on slipping slipping slipping...
Time is always scarce. It slips through the fingers easily. We must be disciplined enough to maximize it. Beautiful piece!
OUr most perversive creation: Time
I love your writing Talon :)
"games of catch-me-if-you-can"...
nice...very well written :)
Living a life in the world of time is so contrary to our inner needs. Your writing reminds me of when I wore a watch and how life was then.
Time certainly does race by. I love your poem--very thoughtful for this time of year when everyone is rushing instead of listing to nature and slowing down.
Wonderful poem about a most precious and elusive commodity!
And "where does the time go?" ... Do love this and somehow the pacing suits the subject. Well done, Kim.
Love the kitty in the header. So wonderful. Made my a.m.
This time of year time is of the essense indeed. I'll have to post my piece about time some time if I have time. See you next time.
Who can know time as well as it knows us? Though it has a more benign aspect as well, I like the very accurate assessment of it as nemesis, which it all too often is. Enjoyed both poem and pic of the mysterious cat eyes.
beautiful poem, heavy...it leaves me to ponder how to befriend time...it is part of our lives, why be adversarial...though it feels that way often, perhaps it is only a matter of loving the fullness, the roundness, the circular nature of it.
oh, one more thing...I love the picture of the kitty. We had a black kitty, Ebony when Gordon and I were first together....Loved that little guy...but boy did he get into mischief....looking at your sweet one, brings back happy memories of our boy.
I like those words - leaving the future undone. Very cool.
And Missy is so cute in that box.
Love the games of catch me if you can. It does feel that way all too frequently, doesn't it?
LOL, looks like Missy is in cardboard box kitty heaven!
ah,
brilliant.
and I find as I age... I crash earlier.
I'm also up earlier?
lurk, stalk, ...
love your verbs, it makes the reading very interesting and the poem appear super powerful...
elegant piece.
well done.
Merry Christmas!
Here is the end of the year awards 4 you, enjoy!
http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2010/12/i-was-pleased-2-beat-flu-december.html
Your support has been a delight to us, at this time of the year, I wish you all the best !
And there you have the clock.
Great words. Glad we still have a little future left to do.
Talon, I absolutely love the latest picture. That is precious. Cats do love their boxes, don't they. Keepers of time...so who can keep time. Mine always gets away from me. Great lines!
Ooooh, that illusive nemesis time. Your work is so good, Talon.
...Our only natural enemy!!
This one dug deep, great writing!
that which we invented is stalking us - and in some cases killing us - we might need to be more careful in the future
return some of our inventions to life instead of distruction
Have to chuckle, when I read your title I thought it applied to the black cat peering from the box, as I have described mine this A.M.
beautifully crafted. loved it.
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Another wonderful piece of writing.
And your poem is so suitable for my current situation (too many things to be done and not enough time...)
Perfect!
I remember the days when all I wanted was for time to go by as fast as possible. Now, I just want it to stop!
I hope you have a wonderful holiday, Talon!
What a great opening line
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Thank you, Boonie!
Snaggle, thank you. Any empty box and Missy is right in it! :) I hope you're less stressed now. Sometimes I wish we could abolish clocks!
Hilary, thanks! You'd like Missy - she's a real sweetheart!
Mandy, that's exactly how I'm feeling at the moment - simply not enough for everything that needs to get done.
Brian, I'm smiling...now I've got that song stuck in my head!
kaykuala, thank you. It's hard when we get torn in so many directions, isn't it?
Lorraine, thank you. I'm glad you enjoy it! :)
Sumit, thank you!
TechnoBabe, that's funny - I don't wear watches either!
Teresa, thank you very much. Yes, time's certainly a premium right now! Which is so irritating. I wish I had a machine to add some extra hours to the day :)
Thanks, JGH!
Jamie, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed.
Jerry, I hope you find the time to post your time piece - I'd love to read it.
Thanks, hedgewitch. So true - it's amazing what our perceptions due to things, isn't it?
Laura, thank you. I'll have to write the flip side poem...the good aspects of time and what it gives to us...
Thanks, Lynn. We usually have a box around just to amuse the cats :)
Shay, she was! And thank you! Yes, time's a sneaky beast at times.
deb, thanks. Our internal clocks sure do make some whacky adjustments throughout our lives, don't they?
Jingle, thank you! I wish you all the best too! Merry Christmas!
Ellis, yup! :)
Leenie, thanks. And I'm glad about the future time, too.
Linda, they sure do! And thank you!
Victoria, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much.
Thanks, Galen. I guess if we froze time we'd be in even more trouble, but I do wish it would slow down at times!
Patricia, wouldn't that be something? Seems we waste a lot of time worrying about how we spent our time and we certainly don't always use our precious commodity as wisely as we could.
lg, lol! Missy is the exact opposite. She's the sweetest cat I've ever known...and LOVES boxes or any hidey-space she can get into.
Thank you, Trisha!
Frieda, I can so relate to what you're saying! I hope, though, that you find some time to enjoy yourself, too!
Thanks, Mama Zen!
Isn't that the truth, b? Thank you and I hope you have a fabulous holiday! Enjoy every second of it! :)
Thanks, Cloudia!
Time seems to be a theme among the OSW contributions I've read so far this week.
It's not often I have favorite lines that are still favorites once they're isolated from the context of the poem, but this time I do:
"the rhetorical toll
tarrying in the dusk"
Happy holidays...wishing you the best. I will be nominating you in the Jingle Poetry End of the Year Awards!
ah time...the best friend and the worse enemy..and how true...it keeps taunting us with catch me if you can...
Stunningly simple yet profound. And good figuration, too. Brilliance here. Merits rereads. Thanks for sharing.
Brilliant ... "heartbeat by heartbeat
twining past and present
leaving the future undone"
Fav lines..
And it seems to be speeding up.
"the nemesis stalks, heartbeat by heartbeat"... Lovely and so true. Wonderful take on our "friend" time!
love it talon.. mine for this thursday: http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/02/14/hunger/
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